Thread:Redfork2000/@comment-30384301-20190305154237/@comment-26888167-20190331032515

PeaVZ108 wrote: Oh, and by the way...

''The elemental ninjas perform the elemental combo, destroying the Orb of Power. However, nothing happens except for the orb losing its color.''
 * Boom: What the what!?
 * Electra: How come it wasn't destroyed!?
 * Gerald: That's one powerful orb. Maybe try destroying it by other means?
 * Boom: What are you talking about? The elemental combo is the only thing that destroys that Orb!
 * Gerald: Oh...
 * CypherDen: I think what it needs is a more powerful elemental combo.
 * Electra: Doesn't make any sense. That was already a six-elemental combo. How anything in the multiverse can resist such an attack is beyond my comprehension.
 * Blade: Perhaps what she's suggesting is if more elemental ninjas help?
 * CypherDen: Eh...sure? We can go with that.

Yes, the elemental combo destroyed the Orb of Power, but nothing else happened after that. Maybe consider changing the dialogue before we move on. You should've been more careful with your wording. The part I put in bold letters clearly screams "The orb wasn't destroyed".

1 - "Nothing happens" Consider "the destructions of the orb had no effect", "nothing else happened", "it had no effect". Nothing happens implies that nothing happened.

2 - The orb lost its color? How can the orb change color if it's already been destroyed? And if you're referring to the shards, specify that you're talking about shards, not the orb, which was already destroyed. Maybe consider "the shards losing their color".

3 - Is the color of the orb important? Does it mean something? If not, it would be pointless to point it out.

Overall, the main reason why I thought it hadn't been destroyed was because of the last sentence of that paragraph, which made it sound like the orb wasn't destroyed. I know it wasn't your intention, but I recommend you be more careful with how you word things. WHenever I write something I always take into account if it can be misunderstood in some way, and try to prevent that.