Thread:PeaVZ108/@comment-27480112-20190325134304/@comment-27480112-20190329113221

JeloElducal wrote: PeaVZ108 wrote: JeloElducal wrote: Everyone.

I'll have to go through this boring part before I can go through probably-interesting territory. Rewrites? You guys would probably disagree with me on this one. What's with you and rewrites? You should have a solid plan before starting a story. Rewrites progressively just make the story less interesting. I kinda did. The story is split into 4 short parts called days.

Day 1

 * Gang fights villain, wins. Rosewell begins to act weird, some gang members take notice.
 * Gang goes to college, with Gerald going to class and the rest meeting the students. Student goes missing.
 * Gang goes to Gerald's house to discuss the disappearance and prepare for the investigation.
 * Gerald arrives back home and talks to the gang about how he feels as if he's being watched.

Day 2

 * The news reports another person goes missing, and the gang starts investigation.
 * Gang teams up with Cheryl. Gerald teams up with Gerry and Peeter.
 * Gang finds a lot of clues. Kinda helpful but not enough.

Day 3

 * Students keep disappearing, and so have some members of the gang.
 * Gang finds even more clues. Gerald notices Gerry and Peeter have gone missing.
 * Gang has to fight Dark Shadow and Black Gem. They tell the gang that Rosewell is the one who kidnapped some of the gang members.

Day 4
Any logic/plot holes? Let me know. Fork, reaction?
 * The school is kinda empty. Students and staff alike are hiding from Rosewell. Cheryl has been kidnapped.
 * Gerald, armed with his sword, finds Nerida getting beaten up by Rosewell. Gerald tries to stop Rosewell, but both him and Nerida get knocked out and taken to the basement.
 * Meanwhile, the gang notice Gerald getting knocked out by Rosewell. Gang decides to follow where both the knocked-out Gerald and Nerida and Rosewell are going.
 * The basement. Gerald is forced to watch Rosewell preparing to kill everyone else she kidnapped, all tied up in chairs, only to be interrupted by the gang.
 * Fight ensues. Some members of the gang fight Rosewell, others rescue everyone and help them get out of the basement. Some members try to rescue Gerald, but are stopped by Rosewell.
 * Eventually, Rosewell gets defeated and Gerald is rescued. Gerald says he is disappointed by Rosewell, and also says he's with someone else: Nerida.
 * Rosewell says sorry to Gerald. Gerald accepts her apology, and asks her to say sorry to everyone else she has kidnapped.
 * Rosewell's apology is accepted.