Thread:JeloElducal/@comment-26888167-20180927161106/@comment-30384301-20180929013439

Chilly Bean BAM! wrote: Argh, I was about to show a ambitious story idea! Oh well, I'll still show it to Pea and Fork:

''Jacqueline now wants to take over the world, so she decides to team up with Bright Spark. One of Jacqueline's newest minions also hypnonizes some members and non-members of the Locked Room Gang to hinder the gang's progress. Will they save the world or perish?''

Like it? Really? That's the best you can come up with? I agree with everyone else, your story idea sounds too generic and unoriginal. Sorry.

What's the point of adding new characters when they're going to end up being similar to your other characters (similar personality and stuff, no character development, no backstory)? Here's the thing. Besides their species, abilities and appearances, I've noticed that there's basically nothing else different between Richard and his friends. Most of their dialogue have been really bland and could've been much better, and they don't really stand out to me.

And your story idea, is it really going to be just the gang fighting against Jacqueline and Bright Spark? Because if it is, it's basically just like almost every story you've written. To be honest, your stories are pretty similar to each other without really any interesting factor that makes them stand out more than the stories Fork and I write. Not to mention, for the stories that you write with Fork, I feel that Fork is the one who basically MAKES the entire story. Without him, stories like Invasion in Foodland and The Rise of the Sprout Squad would've ended up like most of your solo stories, especially The Winter Ring.

So please for once, just listen to our advice when it comes to thinking of story ideas. You told me once that you suck at following the advice we give you, but I personally don't find that as a valid excuse. Anyone can come up with unique story ideas as long as they try harder, and I'm sure you can too.