Thread:PeaVZ108/@comment-8138569-20180524181754/@comment-30384301-20190207153917

1) You don't have to say how battles go in your plot if they are pretty standard, unless they are very important to the story itself to the extent that they're the specific cause of specific events that take place in the story.

2) The plot is...generic. It's basically like a Dr. Zack story but without locked room challenges, or rather almost like most of how your stories would turn out. That's why I suggested to include backstories for Onyx and Dr. Scott to at least make the story feel a bit more fresh.

3) As for the battle against Onyx, I was thinking we can have moments where Diana and Onyx interact and show their rivalry. That would be pretty interesting.

Now I understand why Fork isn't too interested in this story idea but I guess I can still come up with the description. If I were to be honest, without the backstories, this story will feel pretty much like a copy of The Winter Ring. I know you want to avoid that but I'm just saying.