Thread:PeaVZ108/@comment-8138569-20180524181754/@comment-30384301-20190524095458

Evil Script's Last Laugh - Way too rushed. Although I wasn't really interested in the script characters in the first place, I felt that the scripts could've had a much better conclusion to their appearances.

The Magic Pencil - Unnecessary new characters, especially if they are very unlikely to stand out on their own. Honestly, the story would've made no difference without them.

Corolla's Solo Mission - This story isn't bad, it just doesn't stand out enough to be good. They aren't really any interesting factors to this one.

The Electrical Temple - Dawn and Libby are basically Corolla back in the Winter Ring, they just change personalities without any reason. Them redeeming themselves and joining the gang sound way too forced.

Overall, my main points are:

1) Please, no more new characters unless necessary. We have discussed about this many times.

2) Your stories aren't bad, they're just not good enough yet. At this point, you should start adding new elements to your stories that make them seem fresh and different from your past entries. Only then will you improve even more as a storywriter. A story plot or trope will become dull and boring over time the more it is used. No one wants to see five or more villains with the same motive to take over the world, they want to see something different every so often.

3) Rushing stories are just as bad as prolonging or derailing them. You need to give your stories a good balance of length, moments that tend to be more important and interesting should be prolonged while moments that feel more like filler should be minimised as much as possible.

4) I know everyone has a different sense of humor, but trust me, it gets uncomfortable seeing characters constantly screaming at the top of their lungs every few segments after some time. Humor is an optional element to spice up your story, but you have to try different types of jokes to engage readers into getting interested in your stories.

5) I actually felt that Corolla's Solo Mission had potential to be one of your best stories yet. If only it was more interesting, it could stand out.