Thread:JeloElducal/@comment-30384301-20180526092948/@comment-26888167-20180530124753

PeaVZ108 wrote: Redfork2000 wrote: Which part is too dark? Is it when Discord hypnotizes everyone in the gang? Is it when Discord takes over Echo Creek? Or is it when Jelo, Red Fork and Green Shadow seemingly give up? Probably when all hope is lost for the gang, with the members except Jelo, Red Fork and Green Shadow splitting up while being hypnotized by Discord. Oh, I see. The idea there was to make it turn into what could be considered a breaking point. It's used in many stories. You see, no matter how threatening a villain is, readers usually don't take them too seriously if they don't do anything meaningful to the protagonists. In that most of our stories have fallen a bit flat. You see, the gang seems to always be able to defeat the villains too easily, to the point that sometimes, there's not that much suspense, since it's jsut too straightforward. However, with this scene, things change drastically. We get to realize that Discord is a serious threat. This "breaking point", as we could call it, also leads to character development, and will make the climax of the story much more exciting. Just imagine when the gang has been restored, and steps up to fight Discord one last time.