Thread:Redfork2000/@comment-8138569-20180831141006/@comment-26888167-20190226133025

Wait, " she remembers that Blast has a sidekick"? That just randomly happens? Wouldn't it be better if she actually shes the sidekick in action? Perhaps Blast comes along to help her against Captain Blowhole, but is having difficulties fighting off the electricdolphins, until he calls his sidekick Tommy, and together they both defeat Captain Blowhole and his dolphins. This would show her how useful a sidekick can be, and therefore further motivate Corolla to find a sidekick.

However, there's a problem here. What is Melody's motive? Why is she doing what she does? In the whole explanation of the story, you never told me what her motive is. A villain with no motive just isn't a character. First you need to come up with a motive for why she pretends to be Corolla's sidekick, and why she was trying to detray Corolla.

There's another problem with this story idea. Why does Melody become good all of a sudden? Again, there's no motive. For a villainous character to reform, there must be something to cause him/her to make the decision to do that change. Usually the most common motive is when the villain has been suffering for a long time, and the gang offers them their true friendship, something no one else had offered them before. That's how characters like Emily Green and Dark Green Shadow left villainy for good. However, here you're just telling me that Melody fought Corolla, Richard defeats her, and she suddenly decides to become good. What? There isn't a motive for this change in her behavior.

The idea could work, but you really need to polish it further. Right now Melody just seems like a random character who came out of nowhere and wants to harm Corolla for no apparent reason, and then decides to truly become her sidekick, for no apparent reason. You need to fill in these holes in the plot.