Thread:JeloElducal/@comment-30384301-20181030122313/@comment-30384301-20181031014758

JeloElducal wrote: PeaVZ108 wrote: JeloElducal wrote: Expand a bit more on what you're saying. Show what a paragraph looks like with and without improvement. Teach him how to actually do it. Sorry, I don't quite get what you mean by "what a paragraph looks like with and without improvement". Show how a story should look like and how a story SHOULDN'T look like. That'll be too long. But I'll try to remember explaining how a story should be like to Chilly when the time comes.