Thread:JeloElducal/@comment-27480112-20190614125712/@comment-26888167-20190616131833

I do think it has a good amount of storytelling and character development to it, as well as giving a large amount of insight into the past of some characters as well. Overall I'd say it's a solid story. If I could give you a tip to improve, it would be to balance the actions scenes with the more storytelling and backstory parts, since in this story most of those only took place in the beginning and the end of the story, whereas ideally you'd have them spread across evenly throughout most of the story, though of course a greater emphasis on the story near the end is usually very good. It's something I've tried to improve on as well, since most of my Dr. Zack stories tend to fall into that exact same pattern of having lots of repetitive action scenes, and the actual story and plot takes place mostly during the second half of those stories.