Creeper's Real Reviews

Creeper's Real Reviews is a series created by Creeper. He intends to review Stories that users make based on originality, plot and grammar.

Rules

 * 1) Requests can be made in the comments section below.
 * 2) One request per user. You may request again once your first request has been completed.
 * 3) These reviews include memes and heavy criticism. Please don't whine if I don't like your work, it's my job to pick out all of the bad things, because just listing the good things would be boring as heck.