Thread:PeaVZ108/@comment-8138569-20180524181754/@comment-26888167-20190315225421

1. Never ask in the edit summary. It's completely pointless.

2.  Only slightly better. But still isn't enough if you ask me.

3. Here's a tip:

"Corolla: Say, if villains are slowly getting stronger, then perhaps I'll get stronger like them, too. *gets an idea* Hey, maybe I can ask Jewel Johnson! I'm sure she'd be glad to help!"

The way you wrote it makes it sound like she just got the idea out of nowhere. It's the same issue your story had before I suggested she should see other sidekicks before deciding to have one herself. You see, when characters get topics and ideas out of nowhere, it just seems forced. When I read this, how it plays in my mind is this:

Corolla is walking through the streets of Echo Creek, when suddenly, she has an idea. "Say, if villains are slowly getting stronger, then perhaps I'll get stronger like them, too. *gets an idea* Hey, maybe I can ask Jewel Johnson! I'm sure she'd be glad to help!"

You should probably try to not have characters get an idea out of nowhere. If you ask me, she's better off just having a normal walk before she encounters the battle. It feels more natural.