Thread:Redfork2000/@comment-30384301-20180925062435/@comment-26888167-20181002115847

I liked where it was going when Sakura had a nightmare of a powerful dark entity, since that would also foreshadow the season finale.

However, I believe there's a few problems in the story.

1 - The gemstones aren't powerful enough to put up a fight against the gang. Notice how most of them are actually pretty low on the list, meaning that any characters above them could singehandedly defeat each gemstone.

2 - The Gates of Darkness open, summoning a few of the most powerful villains the gang has ever faced (Discord, Shogo the Warlord, Captain Dark Shell and Ink Smash)

That there will not work at all. Basically, if you free Discord, Shogo or Captain Dark Shell, they'll take over the story. If Discord comes in, he'll turn everything into complete chaos and take over the story. If Shogo comes in, he's try to conquer the world. If Captain Dark Shell comes in, he'll begin his plans of world domination. Simply put, we can't afford for any of this to happen. Besides, there's no reason for them to be summoned. Discord is trapped in stone, Shogo can only be resurrected by rebuilding the orb of power, Captain Dark Shell is locked away in the Shadow Dimension by the Amulet of the Dark Seas... it just doesn't make sense for the gates of darkness to summon them. That would be to heavily overlook what ahs already been established.

Plus, you'd be taking away from me the opportunity for a good season finale. Captain Dark Shell is going to be the main villain of this season finale, so he will not appear in any story until the season finale. That would spoil the intensity of the season finale. I believe this idea of the villains being summoned by the gates of darkness is by its own the main problem and plothole in the story.

3 - "Knowing that one of the gemstones is in possession of the Rainbow Orb" Doesn't everyone in the gang already know that Diana Diamond is the one with the Rainbow Orb? I know this is mostly an excuse to have the gang fight each gemstone, but it doesn't really make any sense, realizing that pretty much every one in the gang already knows that Diana is the one with the Rainbow Orb, so in acy case, they'd be fighting each other gemstone with the only purpose of avoiding them to come all together to fight the gang as the Legendary Rainbow Gem. And even that excuse would require some tuning up, since the obvious answer to that would be for Red Fork to go Sun Fork and fight the Legendary Rainbow Gem. This part needs some work.

Now, how can we fix this?

I recommend that the gates of darkness never manage to be opened at all. Instead, they find out who's behind this plan right before Sakura opens the gates at all. After all, Storm Cloud alone is already a big threat. You don't want to make him less of a threat by having a whole party of villains attack at the same time, do you? Remember, the more enemies there are together, the less threatening each individual enemy seems. That's no good for any of the villains you want to summon. IF you don't have the gates of darkness open at all, we'll save ourselves from a big problem in the story.

I also recommend that each gemstone has backup. Maybe they get backup from other gemstones of their kinds? The idea is to not leave them to fight the gang on their own, because individually, they don't stand a chance. With characters like Red Fork, Kyoji, Akasha, Starcade and more being much more powerful than the gemstones, leaving each gemstone to fight a whole team of gang members is just overkill, and what would realistically happen is that the team would defeat each gemstone quickly and without any trouble, which is not what we're looking for. Right?

Then there's the logic error about the fact that the gang already knows that Diana has the Rainbow Orb, so there's not much of a reason for them to fight anyone else instead of going directly towards Diana. You'd think that after seeing the seven gemstones transforming into the Legendary Rainbow Gem, and seeing that Diana is the one who realizes when the Rainbow Orb is stolen (such as the season 3 opening), the gang would obviously know that she's the one with the rainbow gem.

In conclusion, I believe the story in itself isn't bad, but I think you really need to solve these problems before proceeding. Remember, don't change the characters to fit the story, cahnge the story to fit the characters. If certain story elements require to overlook what the characters already know, or if it requires a change in the power level of the characters, then something needs to be fixed. And please, do not bring in he major villains. Storm Cloud is big enough of a threat on his own. Bringing in more villains you'l lhave them steal the attention, and dillute the feeling of threat that Storm Cloud has individually.